yt12353 I somehow got a wither skeleton skull while playing the map! how rare is that, by the way?

Dreadmare A decent first-time map I've have to say. I certainly feel engaged to play through the whole thing. Though it is not without flaws. I've listed here some of my major criticisms with the map

1) gear progression felt way too fast. A gear set only last till the next boss fight, with relatively minimal combat in-between. My suggestion is to either increase the enemy count or reduce the amount of gear tier you can get. Both will require some re-balancing, but I do think it will help with gear progression

2) datapack is a lot faster than command blocks and redstone. Delayed actions can be done by using schedule function command. I suggest that future map are made using datapack instead. Here's a guide on setting up a datapack: https://minecraft.fandom.com/wiki/Tutorials/Creating_a_data_pack

3) barrier block is kinda a cheap way to prevent players from wandering off. It would be better to put in trees, hills or basically anything that visually imply that you can't go past that. It is a tedious task to do that though, so I totally understand.

4) alistair's betrayal doesn't feel as impactful, and this is because we don't really get to bond with him. It would be nice if Alistair was there in the beginning, with his betrayal apparent only in the end.

5) combat felt old and frankly I've never used a bow in the whole map. Maybe that's just me, or perhaps due to the lack of need to do so. On that note, skeletons are really annoying in enclosed space, because as soon as you shoot at them, they begin to attack you. It certainly makes the combat felt very old and not what the map version would suggest.

6) bosses need a lot of work imo. Using thorns is admittedly annoying, as you're getting punished for attacking something that you're supposed to kill. Bosses in general felt way too short and not terribly engaging, although they aren't broken or bad either. Also, using subtitle(with an empty title) to display the boss name is better fitting. Telling the boss' special moves is also a no-no. As they're a major component to a map(as well as one I'm most comfortable with), I'm gonna analyze each bosses and tell you how I feel and what I think could make it better

i) Golden Knight have some interesting idea. However, the spiders are way too big to fit in the maze, thus making them far less threatening. You can practically ignore them. I suggest either making the maze bigger to accomodate for the spider, or putting in cave spider inside the maze to keep it engaging. You can choose to constantly remove poison effect or not. Once you get teleported, he's pretty much just a fast zombie with more health. Adding in those spiders from earlier is a good way to start. Boss also need more health tbh

ii) The adds that spawn before Withered Zombie is kinda underwhelming. Except those fast guy. They're really annoying to deal with. Make them slower is what I would do. To compensate, increase the amount of enemy there are. There's too little add before the boss actually spawn. And once he do, he suffer from the same fate as Golden Knight. Those adds should be allowed to spawn in past that moment. As a side note, it would be cool if Midnight Skeleton somehow helped. I didn't really notice anything relating to "Assistance" when it comes to boss ability. So if he can either shoot down on the player(and maybe even join in periodically to attack with melee), that would be sweet.

iii) Midnight Skeleton is nothing special tbh. The poison cloud only ever hit the middle, which doesn't really make it interesting. Allowing them to spawn on any part of the map would make it more engaging and fun. The adds themselves aren't that special either and feels kinda repetitive at this point(the two bosses prior already have this). You can have splash/lingerin g potions ride on a mob, and when said mob is killed the potion will drop and splashes as if it was thrown. This could be interesting(lik e killing an add will leave behind a poison on the ground). As for the boss himself, previous abilities should remain. I don't remember if poison cloud stop but if it does, it shouldn't

iv) Alistair is very much a miniboss. With the only real mechanic is Herobrine shooting down at you, it isn't as memorable. It's okay if it was indeed meant to be one, as there's no combat between Midnight Skeleton and Alistair.

v) the second battle with Alistair(as well as the last one of the map) doesn't really met the expectation of a final boss(though it does hints at it). For starter, both Withered Zombie and Midnight Skeleton rarely even try walking in. I believe this is caused by barrier completely obscuring their vision meaning it is purely luck that they would even walk in. Removing the barriers on eye-level will allow them to chase after the player, and thus forcing the player to be more environmentally aware. And while we're at it, it might be interesting if the other two bosses get faster each time they fell.

That concude my criticisms with the map. Certainly have potential, and with more works it could be a great one.

Doodle Amazing, really compelling story line :D

McDreng Hm. The map seems competent enough, but it feels a bit "old school" to me. Like, your map feels to me like a time capsule Herobrine's Mansion-era map. Herobrine's Mansion has the advantage of having been a huge innovation in mapmaking, where this feels derivative. I am going to continue playing, as it's always possible that they'll get better. However this one feels like it wishes it was in the 1.4 days when it would have been fresh.

Levi It's a very ambitious project and definetly good for your first adventure map! But there are a lot of flaws:
-The story elements are very forced with teleporting and triggers which ruins the entire immersion.
-Everything is full of barriers, which is a very cheap way to block the player from going to certain places
-The enemy placement is not thought through, and very repetitive
But still a very nice project, maybe I'll check out your newer maps!

DeathEater26 I can"t unlock the last achievement no matter how hard I look I can't find the secret at the end!!!!!! HELP!!!!!!

Luke This map is the best I've played so far. Keep making maps!

SAM_Agent625 Quoting Lady Parrot:

Where is Noahs secret message?

Inside of Herobrine's dungeon/castle in the room that has the button to fight the 4th boss battle inside one of the chests, there is a map and a piece of paper named "This is why I am Alive...". Follow the map, and once you reach the location of the big red X on the map, throw the piece of paper onto the half-slab. The piece of paper will disappear immediately as there is a hopper underneath the half-slab.

Lady Parrot I loved it! In most maps its really hard to figure out what to do next, but this one gives you goals and gives you genral direction for what to do next.
There are only three things that I would change:
1: Make the secret message easier to figure out. I dident get it. Whats down the hallway!?
2: Give us a little time to read the dialog! I fought the battles and then read it.
3: Everytime you die fighting a boss, it would be great if their heath started from the top again.


Keep up the great work!

Johndon It is a difficult thing to take a myth such as Herobrine and retell it while still achieving the same thrill and suspense as previous renditions. This map has seemingly no strengths; while it isn't horrible, it doesn't excel at anything either. There weren't many bugs - however, the description states that you can play with up to three friends, but I can tell you firsthand that this is a single-player only map (all three of us would be teleported to the same block and we couldn't see anything). The writing is laughable, and the grammar doesn't do it any favors. There isn't any variety in the gameplay. Technically, this map is competent. The use of command blocks and dialogue triggers is passable, and the construction of the map was interesting, even if it was small. In the end, there is nothing that should drive anyone to play this.

2/5

emmaaas Amazing map!! I've played a lot of adventure maps and this is by far one of my favorites! Nice job!

Anothuor Quoting Cockwarrior:

This game traumatised me, especially the part where alistair betrays the main character. super relatable because I too had once been betrayed, but it didnt hurt as much because I no longer considered him my friend. this game brought up past memories that i tried to hide from the world because they were too dark for normal people. 2 stars.

Not his fault you had some trauma. Stop spreading hate on other people just because you have your own problems.

Nécrotoy I just finished it.
It was great, the dugeons were cool, the gameplay varied the story ok.
The only problem I met is 2 places I got soft locked in.
The first one at the intro, the fire destroyed the floor of a house and then you can be stuck in a redstone section. (you probably just forgot to turn off the fire ticks)
The secound one is in the secound dugeon. There is that gravel pillart that falls at the middel of the dunjon to unlock a path, once you clear the dungeon, you still can fall in and there is no way out after this. You can just end up at Herobrine's first chace except this time, the event isn't trigered so maybe you should block the way to that part of the dungeon once it's cleared.

Omer1234aaa i cant get the last achievement with the secret message help

e Quoting christian:

WHERE IS ALLSTAIRS VILLAGE IVE BEEN LOOKING FOR A HOUR AND IM EVEN IN SPECTATOR MODE

Go where it says there is another graveyard and go towards a ugly looking path, then use cheats if you can't enter the graveyard structure

RiptideTrident Quoting christian:

WHERE IS ALLSTAIRS VILLAGE IVE BEEN LOOKING FOR A HOUR AND IM EVEN IN SPECTATOR MODE

Just keep going down to the path where it says don't go or go back leave etc...

Das3Tins It looks nice and all but where are the right of the graves? WHERE ARE THE GRAVES EVEN??????????? ??????????????? ??? AM STUCK AT THAT OBJECTIVE AND I SPENT 2 HOURS TRYING TO FIND THE GRAVES AND I CAN'T

Human WHERE THE ALLSTAIR'S VILLAGE

Nolan414 Guys if I being honest, its hard to determine the "I am lost" comments because it's hard to know where you guys are at. The 2 questions that I have been receiving are:

Where is Alistair's village?
Can you turn off the command chats?
Where is the lever at the library?

Answers: Alistair's village is on the path leading to the haunted graveyard. Command Chats are something that I CAN turn off but... I already have all 6 chapters finished so it's going to seem repetitive if keep updating the maps, but I will update the feature into Chapter III. (I already submitted Chapter II). And for the lever at the library, Once you get out of the elevator, go straight. You will see a tiny little cave that has a lever.

And for the people saying that 2 players means that you can only do 16 chunks. I never knew that... so I am sorry... If you set the map to 16 chunks, then there is possibility that it MIGHT work. But I am unsure of that.

Cockwarrior This game traumatised me, especially the part where alistair betrays the main character. super relatable because I too had once been betrayed, but it didnt hurt as much because I no longer considered him my friend. this game brought up past memories that i tried to hide from the world because they were too dark for normal people. 2 stars.

frost what do i throw im so lost

jaogbr pls do part 2 this map is so good and mysterios

Msiobella It is a brilliant but I am stuck on the part were you are in the library and need to find the elevator key!!! I really want to carry on this map so please help

c where is the start exactly (i put the map on a ul world so i don't spawn in the worldspawn)

LukasA2012 wheres the button in the library?? i cant find it