I'm still waiting on another banger like Terra-Swoop Force, Chasing Time or Late, and sadly this ain't it.
Quite good for a first map. Haven't seen that many maps that focus on storyline get this much recognition! (I'm looking at you, horror maps) However, at points I think the story was really cliche and I'm sure everyone would agree that the plot line didn't feel important to me, the fact that it was only about 10-15 minutes of gameplay also made it somewhat forgettable. The problem with this map isn't much due to the map itself, it's because you did this map on your own. Ask for an extra pair of hands next time!
I would actually compare this map to Chasing Time, it's a one-man built map with a simple love story. But the reason Chasing Time worked was because of the atmosphere. Yes it had a cliche storyline and bad grammar but the sound effects, the screenplay, all of that made the story feel important in such a simple time travel story.
That being said, I really hope there is a part two to this. Even though it isn't the serious and emotional map that it thinks it is, it's a fun, exciting and an engaging map. 5/10 nothing special but ain't bad.
0MrEm
ooooow? I feel like the plot was really cliche and the boss fight was redundant. Overall it gets a 6/10. I'd like to see if it can be improved in part 2.
I highly recommend you get someone to look over the writing. It's quite choppy and poorly written. It distracts from the actual game, and turned me away from even finishing talking to John :/
Agree, but it is an amateur making this map, I would say it was acceptable. Nothing more nothing less than a fun map with a cliche plot.
+2Yoshu
I'm still waiting on another banger like Terra-Swoop Force, Chasing Time or Late, and sadly this ain't it.
Quite good for a first map. Haven't seen that many maps that focus on storyline get this much recognition! (I'm looking at you, horror maps) However, at points I think the story was really cliche and I'm sure everyone would agree that the plot line didn't feel important to me, the fact that it was only about 10-15 minutes of gameplay also made it somewhat forgettable. The problem with this map isn't much due to the map itself, it's because you did this map on your own. Ask for an extra pair of hands next time!
I would actually compare this map to Chasing Time, it's a one-man built map with a simple love story. But the reason Chasing Time worked was because of the atmosphere. Yes it had a cliche storyline and bad grammar but the sound effects, the screenplay, all of that made the story feel important in such a simple time travel story.
That being said, I really hope there is a part two to this. Even though it isn't the serious and emotional map that it thinks it is, it's a fun, exciting and an engaging map. 5/10 nothing special but ain't bad.
+1Thunder Gabe
Nice map, not sure that burglar really covers the entirety of the crimes in this map but that is not a big deal. I love the guy that teleports us to the train station :D, and the train station description of the bad guy was straight up hilarious! Overall great job! I made a video on your map you can check it out here https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rxlkbtbyth4&feature=youtu.be or by searching " Thunder Gabe The Burglar "
0Bryn
I highly recommend you get someone to look over the writing. It's quite choppy and poorly written. It distracts from the actual game, and turned me away from even finishing talking to John :/
0BlooHoodDood
Good map, but you could break it pretty easy in the area where you have to find a lever by swimming up the waterfall, but it was still very good and the story was good, apart from spelling errors
+3EmmaRose703
This Is A Super Fun Map! It has a good story line, and it is nice and short so if you just wanna sit down and play something quick and fun i totally recommend it. I would definitely come back for a part 2.
+3Enchanted_Tiger2
I'll just assume this a first map and get going. Here are some problems I've had with the map:
-A burglar is a sneak thief sneaking into people's houses to steal or something like that but the "burglar" in this map is just a straight up murderer. Just saying, you could've just renamed the title "The Murderer". -How come the money is just paper? - After John killed Melanie, the player waits 7 months to get revenge? - I really don't see how a hotel can have stairs going through a long twisting hallway to ONE room and a secret passageway to an outside tent. -How can that guy underneath the tent tp you to John if he doesn't even know John? -Also, the guy said he can tp u to John but when you get tped to the train station, the ticket girl said John passed by 10 mins ago. Shouldn't the teleporter tp you EXACTLY where John is? -You can easily get yourself out of the map at the train. -The "City" isn't really a city. Its just a town. -Lots of spelling errors
The story idea was good but there were too many flaws in it and there were things that were too random. Characters were okay, story was kinda fine but weird and gameplay was strange. I rate this a 3.5/10
+2lordofthesteves
Not a bad map. The puzzles were slightly challenging and the story was okay. 5/10 Interested in part 2 but defiantly wish you had more help on the map.
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2019-09-27 16:49
Quote2019-07-29 15:45
Quotehttps://youtu.be/KfSVfIByEKE
2019-07-28 06:12
Quote2019-07-08 15:51
Quote2019-07-01 18:50
Quote2019-06-14 23:06
QuoteAgree, but it is an amateur making this map, I would say it was acceptable. Nothing more nothing less than a fun map with a cliche plot.
2019-06-09 06:02
Quote2019-06-03 03:00
QuoteQuite good for a first map. Haven't seen that many maps that focus on storyline get this much recognition! (I'm looking at you, horror maps) However, at points I think the story was really cliche and I'm sure everyone would agree that the plot line didn't feel important to me, the fact that it was only about 10-15 minutes of gameplay also made it somewhat forgettable. The problem with this map isn't much due to the map itself, it's because you did this map on your own. Ask for an extra pair of hands next time!
I would actually compare this map to Chasing Time, it's a one-man built map with a simple love story. But the reason Chasing Time worked was because of the atmosphere. Yes it had a cliche storyline and bad grammar but the sound effects, the screenplay, all of that made the story feel important in such a simple time travel story.
That being said, I really hope there is a part two to this. Even though it isn't the serious and emotional map that it thinks it is, it's a fun, exciting and an engaging map. 5/10 nothing special but ain't bad.
2019-06-02 13:28
QuoteI also made a video, please check it out
https://youtu.be/MIsULKzgLDk
2019-05-29 23:05
Quotep.s. I made a mini part 2 but didn't release or anything like that, just some fun for me and my bro!
2019-05-28 17:15
Quote2019-05-26 10:39
QuoteMaybe, but first I'm working on a puzzle/game map.
2019-05-26 08:23
Quote2019-05-26 07:59
Quote2019-05-25 17:38
Quote2019-05-25 05:58
QuoteIt's quite choppy and poorly written.
It distracts from the actual game, and turned me away from even finishing talking to John :/
2019-05-25 02:55
Quote2019-05-24 16:23
QuoteThis was my first map so don't be mad.
My next map is gone be better.
2019-05-24 14:35
QuoteYou have to push in the chat on "if you are ready push me"
2019-05-24 14:32
Quote2019-05-23 17:41
Quote2019-05-23 15:45
Quote-A burglar is a sneak thief sneaking into people's houses to steal or something like that but the "burglar" in this map is just a straight up murderer. Just saying, you could've just renamed the title "The Murderer".
-How come the money is just paper?
- After John killed Melanie, the player waits 7 months to get revenge?
- I really don't see how a hotel can have stairs going through a long twisting hallway to ONE room and a secret passageway to an outside tent.
-How can that guy underneath the tent tp you to John if he doesn't even know John?
-Also, the guy said he can tp u to John but when you get tped to the train station, the ticket girl said John passed by 10 mins ago. Shouldn't the teleporter tp you EXACTLY where John is?
-You can easily get yourself out of the map at the train.
-The "City" isn't really a city. Its just a town.
-Lots of spelling errors
The story idea was good but there were too many flaws in it and there were things that were too random. Characters were okay, story was kinda fine but weird and gameplay was strange.
I rate this a 3.5/10
2019-05-23 05:22
Quote2019-05-23 02:26
QuoteInterested in part 2 but defiantly wish you had more help on the map.
2019-05-23 00:53
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